英语专四:作文之范文赏析--校园政治的利与弊

发布日期:2014年06月20日
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题目:The Benefits and Dangers of Campus Politics 

  写作要求 

  Nowadays many college students are interested in campus politics, including running for heads of various communities. What are the possible benefi ts and dangers of this enthusiasm for campus politics?

  Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

  The Benefi ts and Dangers of Campus Politics

  You are to write in three parts.

  In the fi rst part, state specifi cally what your idea is.

  In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

  In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

  Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

  审题思路 

  本题是一道分析利弊/差异型的题目,要求分析参与校园政治的利与弊,因此很明显文章中必须包含:

  1. 概述该现象,指出这样做有利有弊;

  2. 具体说明好处在哪里,弊端在哪里;

  3. 重申自己的观点,再次概述利弊点。

  范文赏析 

  The Benefits and Dangers of Campus Politics

  Campus politics has improved the quality of students’ life on campus and is playing an important role in college life. While we may advocate it because of the benefits, we cannot ignore its problems.

  引言部分:作者先明确表明“校园政治”是大学生活非常重要的一部分,但在强调其带来的好处的同时,作者提醒不能忽视其带来的问题。

  On the positive side , college students will grow mature and develop their abilities from participation in campus politics. For one thing, by attending campus political activities, students will learn how to handle relationships with all sides in a more mature way, which will better prepare them for life after graduation. For another, they can develop their sense of responsibility as well as practical capabilities, especially management and coordination capacity, because the campus political activities provide students with a stage to show themselves and bring their abilities into full play.

  On the negative side, campus politics might bring some problems. Too much participation in campus politics might influence study. Besides, some students’ being keen on campus politics is for fame and gain, which is harmful to the healthy development of mentality . Therefore, schools and teachers should give necessary instructions to students on their participation in campus politics.

  主体部分:作者先从积极面分析了参加校园竞选等活动带来的两大益处:使学生们变得成熟并增强了责任心和实际能力;接着又从消极面分析了参与“校园政治”可能带来的问题:对学习和身心健康发展的影响。针对这些问题,作者简单提出学校和老师应给予必要的指导。就写作手法而言,作者主要是进行逻辑论证,正反对比。全文长短句的运用非常恰当,主要是用短句点题,说明观点,用长句进行解释说明。

  All in all, we cannot deny the benefits campus politics brings to college students, but we should also be aware of the potential danger it may hold for them as well. With necessary guidance, campus politics can be a good stage for students to grow.

  总结部分:作者用all in all自然而然地引入到了文章的结尾。作者先概述了上面提及的两个方面,然后重申了自己的观点:在恰当的指导下,校园政治是大学生成长的良好舞台。

  亮点回放 

  1. campus politics: “校园政治” ;下文还使用了campus political activities来指 同一意思 。

  2. advocate: “提倡,主张” ;此处也可以用support, back等替代。另外注意advocate也可以作名词使用 ,be an advocate for/of sth.是 ……的提倡者/支持者 。

  3. on the positive side: “从积极面来说” ;也可以用from the positive perspective来代替 。

  4. better prepare: 通常prepare的用法是be prepared for(为……做好 了准备 ),此处使用 了主动形式prepare sb. for sth. (让某人为某事做好 了准备 )。better是well的比较级 ,所以此处表示 “使他们更好地为……做好准备”。

  5. capability: “能力,性能” ,与下文 的capacity, ability为近义词 ,这些近义词 的使用使文章富有变化性 ,有亮点不单调 。

  6. coordination: “协调” ;此处近义词有organization, regulation等 。

  7. bring their abilities into full play : “使他们的能力充分发挥” ;此处的bring ... into full play是固定搭配 ,比简单使用fully display要正式。

  8. being keen on: “渴望,爱好” ,比单纯地使用like要好,此处的sb. s being keen on整体用作主语,不过这里还可以使用enthusiasm,passion,zeal等,后面接for 。

  9. mentality: “心理状态” ,此处还可以使用morality来代替。

  10. instruction : “指导”;与下文的guidance为近义词,通常的用法是instruct sb. to do sth.或者instruct sb. on sth.。

  11. deny: “否认,拒绝给予” ;搭配有deny sb. sth.(拒绝给予某人某物 )。

  12. be aware of: “意识到” ;近义词为be conscious of,realize等 。